WordWizard
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Post by WordWizard on Jul 10, 2013 22:00:09 GMT -7
I figure writing is a creative venture, and I think it'd be good if we had a single place to put small writing things than make a new thread for everyone's writing things. Unless one person's writing thing is just MASSIVE then I guess they could make their own thread for it, IDK. i may or may not do that because i have a fairly extensive writing project type thing but i also want to keep some things about it 'away from the public' as it were but bahasdhaslkajsd ANYWAY This thread is for- Posting random writing samples of yours for critique by others to help you improve
- Getting help with ideas for your writing projects
- Help with naming characters
- Just naming things in general, actually, people need help with that sometimes, I for one are TERRIBLE with names
- Developing concepts and characters
- Practicing writing with prompts
- How not to make Mary Sues
- Hopefully helping others onto the path to becoming better writers
- And other things related to your writings, the list could theoretically go on FOREVER
Things such as
- Outright hating on others' writing (though keep in mind that criticism IS NOT hate, but also that there is a relatively fine line between the two)
- Complaining about how bad someone's writing is
- Bullying others based on their creativity/lack thereof
- Telling people their writing/character is bad
(and they should feel bad) without offering advice/constructive criticism
- Just being an outright jerk in general
- Refusing to accept criticism/insulting those who offer constrictive criticism and advice
And so on are NOT allowed (or at least not accepted) in this topic. Telling people to stop writing because they are bad/their grammar/spelling is terrible is not a good thing to do.
EVERYONE CAN IMPROVE and that's what this thread is here to help with! ?(?O?)?
ALSO, here's some helpful tools, I should've put these here earlier
The Universal Mary Sue Litmus Test What /IS/ a Mary Sue, tho, you ask? Characterization, and even character design advice here! And just general storytelling things This whole website is actually VERY helpful, though it IS a bit advanced and wordy
So let's get things started with a prompt!
Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to describe an object of your choice without being overly vague, but it must flow well and not be over-descriptive.
HARD MODE; You must also not explicitly name your object, though words such as 'blade' are fine, if you're describing a sword
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Post by ?Draco? on Jul 10, 2013 22:05:56 GMT -7
Kewl
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WordWizard
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Post by WordWizard on Jul 10, 2013 23:32:56 GMT -7
I'm sorry, Draco, your writing sample is too short to critique properly, though the word 'cool' is not spelled correctly and any object description, if you were going to do so, that is, is sadly non-existent.
Joking, i'm joking All jokes aside, thanks, Draco! I hope this thread becomes semi-active! I like helping people with their writing, though I'm better at the creative concepts than actual advice. i'm not the best writer ever, but i can at least help, y'know? ^^
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Post by ?Draco? on Jul 10, 2013 23:37:23 GMT -7
Yes indeed!
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Post by TreyGamr58 on Jul 11, 2013 7:04:44 GMT -7
The Ugly Barnacle By: Patrick Star TreyGamr58
Once upon a time there was an ugly barnacle. He was so ugly, everyone died!
The end
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Post by gone. on Jul 11, 2013 7:16:34 GMT -7
XD so beautiful. Ill give this thing a shot. This is a thing taken from one of my unfinished fanfics xD so is that okay?
As Isabella slowly walked through the mess of weeds, something silver caught her sight. She turned her head to see a shining necklace hanging on a well-rusted hook jutting from wood. There was a small emerald shaped as a butterfly in the center, lined with pure silver. The whole treasure seemed marvelous, but the thought that puzzled Isabella was, why wasn't it dirty as hell, or at least rusted? It looked old and therefore important, so she snatched it and ran out, dodging the flying knives above her. WEWT ACTION xD
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Post by TreyGamr58 on Jul 11, 2013 9:21:37 GMT -7
I'll give out actual good ones I've made once I get on the computer.
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WordWizard
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Post by WordWizard on Jul 11, 2013 14:44:32 GMT -7
The first instance of "the object changed" could probably be removed without affecting anything, as to me it seems slightly redundant with the same thing being stated at the end. As could "circular", possibly, Imagery is pretty good, I'm picturing a sort of radio type thing with glowing dots all over it. Overall pretty good, though.
10/10 WOULD READ AGAIN 12/10 READ IT AGAIN (how did i know this was going to be posted XD)
Mild continuity issue; You stated/implied before that the necklace wasn't "dirty as hell or rusted" and yet it looked old? It's not an actual problem, I'm just a nitpick when it comes to small details and are occasionally dumb ^^'
Okay, here's my thing, I kinda wrote it from the seat of my pants and didn't have enough time to nitpick over it.
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Post by MaryJane on Jul 11, 2013 17:09:05 GMT -7
(I've actually written this piece before hand and want to know what others think of it, and how it can be fixed. By the way, it's poetry.)
You stand upon a bridge Not wanting to move Because, if you do You will be held prisoner to the water
So you move Trying to flee the small confinement You fall Submerged in the water
You try to swim up Only to find that your held down by an anchor Slowly falling
You scream for help Only for water To proceed into your lungs
You look up at the bridge You see a girl She stands there Stares And leaves
Everyone leaves It doesn't concern them So they don't care
I ask you As your senses fades Your hearing slips away Your Vision goes black
How does it feel To be betrayed By your own family?
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Post by Nightpoppy? on Oct 18, 2013 3:31:37 GMT -7
A tall woman in a crimson, long robe awaited for the one. The one she could use and control. Her calm white eye were locked onto the hollow hallway, the glaze in her eyes showing no emotion. She had gems dangling from her hair, attached to copper and other metals wich were intertwined with long, flexible string-like cords that were clipped to her hair. Her hair was a shiny white with some very light blue tainted in it. Her claws were pained black with ink, in which she has printed messages on walls.
(I has huge head ache, I'll finish this later <xD)
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Post by Lol911 on Oct 19, 2013 20:44:03 GMT -7
Here, you know what... I haven't done much writing lately. Which saddens me greatly. I always thought the only way to entertain yourself in this hell-hole was to write. Write what you say? Whatever they tell us too of course. "Maybe we should retaliate!" My best friend Julia always says. But I know she wouldn't dare to do so. She remembers what happened to the last kid who stood up for himself, yelling about rights and things. You're probably wondering where my friend and I are. I doubt we're in America... How long has it been? How many days untill we stop?! I can see the dark circles under everyones eyes. If anyone bothered to notice them, I doubt they would do anything about it. Ok. This probably sucks. :I This is actually part of a story that I've been working on lately. MEEP.
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